tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6834596026525717264.post2695385121328585702..comments2023-12-14T13:49:25.768-08:00Comments on This Gay Relationship: Father F.Rick Modienhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02157314737543591048noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6834596026525717264.post-66932320880665369712009-08-28T13:49:35.728-07:002009-08-28T13:49:35.728-07:00Thanks, Jeanette, for giving this another reading,...Thanks, Jeanette, for giving this another reading, and for offering some suggestions I should consider in further revisions of this piece.<br />A writer's goal is always to be as clear as possible, so that his or her meaning is conveyed to the reader. Whenever a writer fails to do that, he or she needs take a closer look at what's written and make the appropriate changes. <br />I didn't realize that you reread some of my posts, and I'm most grateful to you for taking the time to do that and for showing me places where I could have been clearer in my meaning. <br />Thanks again.Rick Modienhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02157314737543591048noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6834596026525717264.post-38538608055129335642009-08-28T11:27:34.155-07:002009-08-28T11:27:34.155-07:00OK - in rereading, I found 3 areas that need atten...OK - in rereading, I found 3 areas that need attention, but these I think are probably typos that may or may not be in your original manuscript.<br /><br />1. "and I watched as he drove down the tarmac and turned right onto Gordon Drive, St. Pius X and the rectory several blocks down the street"<br /><br />I got a bit lost here at the Gordon Drive, St. Pius part. I imagine you're missing the word "to"?<br /><br />2. "told my mother when I got up later that morning, although I have no recollection of it, nor do I remember what she said."<br /><br />I was a little unlcear as to what it was you had no recollection of - what exactly you said to her, actually talking to her at all, or what she said back to you (which would make the next line redundant). I'm not trying to be picky, I just find it a bit awkward. <br /><br />3. "since I wasn't the one who done anything wrong."<br /><br />Again I think you're simply missing a word in there. <br /> <br />I know what you mean by over editing. I always found I got better marks in school if I just wrote an essay off the cuff the night before it was due. Everytime I sat down and edited it, I somehow took the essence away resulting in much lower marks. I wouldn't recommend this method to everyone of course!Unknownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02937915152276771653noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6834596026525717264.post-47633103326507167082009-08-27T20:33:12.504-07:002009-08-27T20:33:12.504-07:00Thanks to both of you for your feedback.
First, al...Thanks to both of you for your feedback.<br />First, along the lines of what you said, Wendy, I felt unexpected relief to have finally had the courage to share this here. Almost no one knows about this incident, and, in posting it to my blog, a weight was lifted from my shoulders. I felt much lighter as I made dinner late this afternoon, after having posted it. <br />On the subject of being a brutal editor, Wendy, it would be unfair of me to ask you for that. First, I know it's far from perfect. The problem with editing is that you can edit your brains out, think you've finally reached a point when you can't improve it further, then discover there even more things that don't meet your expectations. This is where I'm at with my whole damn memoir, all 426 pages of it. It's a lot of work editing just four pages, let alone 400 or more. The task is daunting, and that, to some degree, is why I've left it alone. Every time I start to edit in earnest, I give up in frustration. I'm not to the point where I can do that yet.<br />Second, a brutal edit demands a line by line, even word by word reading and examination, and lots of work on the part of the editor to provide the feedback that will be most helpful. So, no, I'm not looking for that from you.<br />What I was looking for are any glaring errors or inconsistencies. If you saw anything like that, please let me know. Otherwise, in my own good time, I'll keep reworking it until I'm happy (like that will ever happen). The danger in editing is that you can edit so much, the very life is sucked out of what you've written. I don't want that either, so there's a fine line. <br />Thanks again to both of you. I appreciate you sticking with my blog and taking the time to read it and to comment on it.Rick Modienhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02157314737543591048noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6834596026525717264.post-17938593032663268552009-08-27T19:21:06.368-07:002009-08-27T19:21:06.368-07:00Rick, thanks for posting this. You've shared ...Rick, thanks for posting this. You've shared a hurtful part of your past and that is never an easy thing to do. I think we've all got similar situations that we'd like to keep locked away at the back of the closet, but airing them out can often clear the cobwebs that mess with our heads. Your posts are helping me get to know you better, Rick. I read every word and I do appreciate your frank honesty.<br /><br />As for feedback . . . not sure what you're asking for. If it's about the story, well, I've given you some already. If it's about your writing, my kids would tell you RUN IN FEAR because I am a brutal editor! Funny how all of them keep coming back for more.Wendyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03361076209603565742noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6834596026525717264.post-75128605035508769722009-08-27T19:05:37.007-07:002009-08-27T19:05:37.007-07:00Interesting and well written Rick. I felt I was th...Interesting and well written Rick. I felt I was there with you. I'll leave any technical critique to someone more qualified than myself :).Unknownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02937915152276771653noreply@blogger.com